Something Happened?
On one special
day,
the
day
before
my
birthday, something happened.
I
appeared
in
a
dark
room,
there
was
no
light
or
sound,
I
was
very
confused,
I looked in front and behind. I
said which way?
there
was
no
way
for
me
to
get
out,
I
do not even
know
how
I
had
got
in
here,
but
I
do
know
something
was
happening
to
me. I
was
starting
to
fade,
I
woke
up
to
my
parents
saying
“that
I
was
in
a
comma
for
3 days.” “I
fell
down
the
stairs
and
broke
my
arm
and
leg,”
my
parents
said
“that I
was
in
shock”.
You have a good story but, when you said 'which way'. Which way should be in quotations and capitalized.The word after that 'there' should be capitalized since it's a new sentence.
ReplyDelete“that I was in a comma for 3 days.” “I fell down the stairs and broke my arm and leg,” The 'that' should be capitalized, you don't need the quotation in front of 'I'. It's in the same sentence. You should put a period at the end of leg instead of a comma. So the next sentence should read, My parents said, "That I was in shock."
One last thing during those sentences you should take out 'that'.
You need to indent the first sentence and also you don't need the comma in front of confused in your second sentence, put a period instead.
ReplyDeleteAlso, the prompt is /I looked in front and behind. Which way?\ not /I looked in front and behind. I said, "Which way?"\