One
Sunday morning, there was a BIG red pot with a creepy face located right in the
center of a public park, the pot also had some weird designs all over. The pot
had something creepy sticking up at the top, it looked like it was legs covered
in blood. I was investigating the pot later that day, I was wondering who would’ve
put that gigantic pot right in the park were all kids are? I thought it was
just for decoration but it looked really scary and impropriate for kids. I
wrote a letter to the city if they can take the pot away and they did.
Great story but I think you should have put a period in "right in the centre of the pot. The pot had some weird designs all over. But overall great story!
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ReplyDeleteI think this sentence I was investigating the pot later that day, I was wondering who would’ve put that gigantic pot right in the park were all kids are? should go like this I was investigating the pot later that day, I was wondering who would’ve put that gigantic pot right in the park where all the kids are? so I just added where and the before the kids
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